Resume Critique help?

[RBK]

Hi, there is a job fair at school coming up, and the big 5 banks will be there recruiting graduates and students for full/part time. So I just want to make sure that my resume looks good in their eyes. So fire away!! Say whatever you want, so I can get some guidelines on fixing this resume up. Thanks.

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[nsk]

This job fair, is it only for seneca students? or can other ppl get in as well? (I.e. me, a job searcher as well)

btw, for your resume, i'd recommend first and foremost making it into more of a skills resume, i dont know what the technical term for it is....but i think it's rather obvious that your previous experience might not necessarily help you land a finance/banking job....so rather than presenting that, i'd suggest presenting your soft skills, achievements related to finance or what not in an academic setting...just to start.

hope that helps...and if there is indeed a way to get in, pls do tell XD

[CharmyPoo]

I am not sure what career services Seneca offers but I suggest that you take your resume to them to critique. You should also google on some tips on how to write a good resume. For starters, if you know you want to apply to a bank - you should make your objective more specific.

[cui5]

the tense in your resume is wrong. Should be past actions for a job done in summer 2004

[saugaboy]

i wouldnt put your languages unless they specifically ask for it. That is something you can always say in an interview. Not to get into a racial argument but sometimes the person screening may have sterotypes and your objective is to get the interview.

The person interviewing you may be someone else and they will decide if they can work with you or not.

oh i just went back to read your post, not sure if it will make a big difference if you will get hired or not, but i find sometimes the first impression is very important (which is your resume) and you dont want to lose out if someone has a racial prejudice. If the job states looking for bilingual person, then state it if not, dont.

[uncleted]

I would change the layout. The dates of your jobs, studies, etc. experience should be the first thing you show (or at least stick them on the left), otherwise they kind of melt in with the title of the job, company and location.

I'm not sure of your use of the term "qualification" because in employment terms you would normally use this for technical or academic qualifications.

You may also want to show how many years you have spent on your individual tertiary studies.

English should be a given in your area. Cantonese may not be a bad thing depending on where you intend to work. Places like banks and public offices generally look on that as a major plus. Fluency in other languages is generally considered a good thing, however as saugaboy pointed out some people might have stereotypes. This is different to somewhere like Quebec where you are almost expected to list your English and French proficiency.

[Dryluck]

This job fair, is it only for seneca students? or can other ppl get in as well? (I.e. me, a job searcher as well)

btw, for your resume, i'd recommend first and foremost making it into more of a skills resume, i dont know what the technical term for it is....but i think it's rather obvious that your previous experience might not necessarily help you land a finance/banking job....so rather than presenting that, i'd suggest presenting your soft skills, achievements related to finance or what not in an academic setting...just to start.

hope that helps...and if there is indeed a way to get in, pls do tell XD

I think nsk means a "Functional Resume".

And to add on to the fear of the languages, they could get an interviewer that interviews you in canto. :twisted: However, you are going to be applying to banks, and they are always looking for multi-lingual tellers. If that's what you're aiming for. So make sure to mention that you can speak.

Generally...
Make better use of white spaces (especially job experiences... it's all crammed to the left!)

For your job experiences....
Put your job position and company in bold
Keep a continuous date format (drop the Summer, and put the actual months in... May 2003 - August 2003.)
Change it so that all of your job positions are similar to your first one, where you actually describe what you did and not just put a single word down. o.O
Action verbs are you friend! (google)
I'd drop the newspaper carrier position, as you don't have as many points for it as the others.

Schooling...
Any awards?
Change it around, so that you can easily read Seneca College.

ie. one way:

Seneca College
Financial Planning - Business Administration
Current GPA: X/4.00 (Only add in if good. :P)
Expected to Graduate in 2010.

You could even add a relevant courses section. (Banks are all about bureaucracy and authorization and e-mailing...lots of e-mailing)

Final Thoughts...

Get it critiqued by your career centre.
Consider adding in a Hobbies/Personal Interests Section. (add in Golf...everyone plays golf at banks...although it may not get you hired. jk jk :P)

That was long.
Good luck! :D

[saugaboy]

If you need help on expanding on your resume, in that i mean your previous job descriptions. I suggest looking up postings for those jobs you have done in the past online, at workopolis or monster. Read over the job description and if they appy to you then write them in yur resume.

Sometimes its hard to put in writing all the responsibilites you had in a previous job. I find this gets my pen moving and helps to build a more descriptive list of duties and responsibilities.